Multi-cultural ocietie are mixture of ethnic group. To what extent do you think the advantage of multi-cultural ocietie outweigh the diadvantage?
Multi-cultural（这是形容词，怎么作主语了？！） ha been brought to potlight recently, a a prevailing phenomenon nowaday（多余） that the countrie on the earth are becoming more and more exchanged（这个句子很晦涩，a在这里是作连词吗？如果是的话，它应该引导一个句子，那么后面只有that引导的同位语从句，却没有主句的谓语动词了！！！）.People at every corner to hare and enjoy the ame piritual life together, which not only promote a climate of peace and properity but alo enrich the city life and broaden the horizon of human being. Such a trend ha both merit and demerit although, a for me, the former prevail over the latter obviouly. （80word）
结构分析
：前面写了n句话，都是在引题，但是内容显得有点啰嗦。最后一句是作者的观点，即主题句，写得还行。