Talk about myelf
My name i zhangPing .Iam fifteen year old. I live in BeiJing. One of my favorite ubject i biology. I am intereted in drawing . In my free time, I often go camping, draw ome pictureof plant, enjoy the ong of bird in nature. I want to be a biologit when I grow up .I am outgoing and like talking to other.Would you like to make friend with me ? If we can be friend, I will be very glad
1.“pictureof”应改为.“picture of”
2.文章结尾略显不畅通，建议再写出你交友的要求标准联系方式较好。例如：I like making friend who are outgoing like me,Would you like to be my friend? If you’d like to,pleae call me at …. I will be very glad.
3.“…pictureof plant, enjoy the …”改为.“…pictureof plant and enjoy the …”注意并列结构最后一个成分常用and 连接。
文章语句连贯，句意完整，标点正确，有较强的连词组句能力和扎实的英语基础。我认为除结尾以外，是一篇优秀的短文。