"Such nonmaintream area of inquiry a atrology， fortune-telling， and pychic and paranormal puruit play a vital role in ociety by atifying human need that are not addreed by maintream cience."
这个题目是讲主流和非主流的关系，提的方面是科学领域内。但是这个题目里面我自认为的一个问题是，peaker把atrology，fortune-telling，pychic，和paranormal puruit也归结为科学的范畴内了，但这些都是我们通常成为的伪科学的几个典型方面。
这个题目，目前我没有想到什么好的方面来支持这个peaker的正确性。希望有持支持观点的朋友来说说你自己的看法伪科学的相关释义附在点评最后处
Thi tatement actually conit of two claim: that non-maintream area of inquiry are vital in atifying human need， and that thee area are therefore vital to ociety. I concede that atrology， fortune- telling， and pychic and paranormal puruit repond to certain baic human need.
干净利索的分析了题目，但是个人认为还不是分析的很透彻。
However， in my view the potential harm they can inflict on their participant and on ociety far outweigh their pychological benefit.
自己观点出来了，反对。是一个让步的关系，先承认了是有此方面的作用，用了however来了个转折给从更大的方面给否了。WWw.hAOZUowEn.com
Admittedly， thee non-maintream area of inquiry addre certain human need， which maintream cience and other area of intellectual inquiry inherently cannot.
开始驳斥了，首先肯定了其之作用。
One uch need involve our common experience a human that we freely make our own choice and deciion in life and therefore carry ome reponibility for their conequence. Faced with infinite choice， we experience uncertainty， inecurity， and confuion; and we feel remore， regret， and guilt when in retropect our choice turn out be poor one. Undertandably， to prevent thee bad feeling many people try to hift the burden of making difficult choice and deciion to ome nebulou authority outide themelve——by relying on the tar or on a tack of tarot card for guidance.
具体分析了这些种学科产生的具体原因。
Two other uch need have to do with our awarene that we are mortal. Thi awarene bring a certain meaure of pain that mot people try to relieve by earching for evidence of an afterlife. Abent empirical proof that life extend beyond the grave， many people attempt to contact or otherwie connect with the o-called "other ide" through paranormal and pychic puruit. Another natural repone to the propect of being eparated from our loved one by death i to earch for a deeper connection with other here on Earth and elewhere， in the preent a well a the pat. Thi repone manifet itelf in people‘ enduring facination with the paranormal earch for extraterretrial life， with o- called "pat life" regreion and "channeling，" and the like.
这个部分的逻辑关系简洁明了，写的很利索。写出了这些cience存在和产生的理由。阐述的也可以说是比较的excluive——这个单词大家不要忽略，等我们开始分析ETS范文的时候你就会发现在满分范文的评语中这个单词会多次出现的。这个是对tetee的逻辑思维的一个考量的方面。
While the ort of puruit which the peaker lit might be "vital" inofar a they help ome people feel better about themelve and about their choice and circumtance， query whether thee puruit are otherwie ueful to any individual or ociety.
开始了自己的质疑。
In the firt place，用一个非常普通的用于连接的词语开始了自己的列举becaue thee puruit are not rooted in reaon， they are favorite patime of charlatan—经典，非常好的否定，hit home。and other who eek to prey on dupe—好，一个单词就直截了当的表明自己的想法driven by the aforementioned pychological need. And the dupe have no recoure. After all， it i impoible to ae the credibility of a tarot card that tell u how to proceed in life imply becaue we cannot know where the path not taken would have led. Similarly， we cannot evaluate claim about the afterlife becaue thee claim inherently defy empirical ?这个形容词是经常用来解释peuocience的用词，我后面会给大家附一个伪科学的解释大家可以多次找到这个empirical这个词——proof——or diproof.