Doing Shopping Online
With the development of the Internet, hopping i no longer a tiring thing. Jut click your moue to chooe the article you like, and the purchae i done. You dont even have to tep out of the room. It eem all eay and quick.
However, people opinion vary on thi trend. Some believe that on line hopping i time and money aving. With plentiful election option, they can buy whatever they like at any time convenient. Still other init that mi-purchaing alone i annoying enough, not to mention the credibility of the eller and the afety of their account.
In my opinion, the convenience and excitement of on line hopping i beyond all doubt. In the meantime, we mut alway bear in mind that certain trap do exit, o wed better make ure the eller are trutworthy before buying. In addition, we hould alo guard ourelve from the potential hacker who might teal our account information.
文章点评：
这是一篇中等偏上的学生作文。 本文先对网购热潮进行简介，引出全篇；接着对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比；最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰，逻辑严密，行文流畅，用语较为地道。
下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处：
1. 文章结构上，能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的三段式（提出问题、分析问题、解决问题）。 但是，以With the development of the Internet为开首语，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意，应该能写出更好的句子。[由wwW.HaoZuoWen.com整理]