Fat Food i more popular though citizen, epecially young man and children. They eat them at leat once a week.
The time of the people to have a break and to eat meal i compreed by citizen who work hard though the fat pace of life in modern ociety. So they chooe Wetern Fat Food which i made to convenient and you-dont-wait, of coure it deliciou, that they can have much more time to work.
A for children, maybe Fat Food i the in-thing among them. Eating a KFC will be pride in their young heart. They will hare the experience of enjoying KFC or MacDonald to their bet friend. Unforgettable deliciou for children i a it hould be.
A far a I am concerned, the collective canteen which hould offer high quality food mut be opened more by company. For children, parent ought to educate kid what i healthy food and what food houldnt be eat more.
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（加Wetern）Fat Food i more popular though（改为among citizen, epecially young man and children. They eat them at leat once a week.
The time of the people to have a break and to eat meal i compreed by citizen who work hard though the fat pace of life in modern ociety. So they chooe Wetern Fat Food which i made to convenient and you-dont-wait, of coure it deliciou,（改为convenient and deliciou）（加o）that they can have much more time to work.[由wWw.HaozuoWen.com整理]