多少年来，大家一直都是在当学生写作文，今天就换一个角色，当一回老师判作文，这可绝非仅仅寻求感觉的刺激！最重要的是，我们要用上面讲的高分作文的评判标准和差作文的劣迹表现，分别对一篇漫画考题的高、低分实考样卷进行评判打分，然后“对症下药”、“量体裁衣”，才有出奇的效果啊！
A every thread of gold i valuable, o every moment of time.
一寸光阴一寸金。
作文实例
Direction:
Study the following drawing carefully and write an eay in which you hould
终点又是新起点
1) decribe the drawing,
2) interpret it meaning, and
3) upport your view with example.
You hould write about 200 word neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 point)
高分作文
The cartoon depict a vivid picture in which an athlete, dripping weat, i ruhing to the end. Obviouly, he win the match, but thi i not the key meage conveyed by the picture. The mot triking feature of the drawing i that the ame line i marked a both “the tart” and “the end”, which indicate that although the athlete came to the finih, a new race i waiting for him.
The idea conveyed by the cartoon i apparent: the end i a new tart. It i widely accepted that we hould not be atified with the preent achievement, for nowaday new challenge and competition never top. The market economy and competitive ociety drive many people tudying hard for higher academic degree, ome of them even eeking the opportunitie to tudy abroad. We hould pare no effort improving ourelve, mater high technology and profeional kill. Then we can make ue of it to devote ourelve to ociety.[由好作文www.hAOzuowEn.com整理]
Take my father a an example. He wa denied higher education for hitorical reaon. But by elf?tudy he became a technician in a factory. Many people thought he wa content. But he never topped tudying. He took coure of law in hi pare time. Later he became a lawyer. “The finihing point i jut a new tarting point”, he aid to me. （219 word）
该文在阅卷中获得18分（满分20分）的好成绩，是有原因的。内容切题，表达清楚，语义连贯，最大的特点是句式富有变化，基本功扎实。文章的第一句，作者就用了定语从句、分词结构两种形式，使阅卷人眼前一亮，接下来分析图画的寓意，也很简洁到位。最后一段的举例也是一个亮点，运用父亲不断学习的事例来进一步论证观点，具体而贴切，不落俗套。另外，句子结构和用词正确，但也有个别错误，如上文第二段标出的“mater”与“improve”并列，应用“matering”的形式，但毕竟“瑕不掩瑜”。
低分作文
All thing in their being are good for omething.
天生我才必有用。The place of end point i alo the tarting point. From the picture, we can ee a young man who i running toward the end point, it? very clearly to how that every one of u mut effort and can?t top for the aim of u in the fierce competition ociety. A we all know, firtly, a young man who tudy and work in the modern ociety need have a pirit of to tudy hard and activity, to keep a good ituation and poition.
For intance, thi year i my ninth year after when I graduated, after nine year, I?m alway felling need to continue tudy to improve my knowledge of major. becaue, thi ociety developing i o rapidly, if I can?t catch more knowledge of now about my major, I will can?t keep the continou developing ociety. So I think, peronally, It? like the portman of the picture that only continue to run and effort toward the place of end point, that i neceary to young people in the ociety.
In ummary, my final concluion i only to continue running toward end place and the place i alo a new tating for another aim, only o. It? a pirit of all young people. although the road i very hardhip. but thi i very important to u. (216 word)
这篇文章得分6分，远远低于及格分12分，可能作者还有点“委屈”，“我的字数也符合要求，也是三段，也有举例，也有分析，为什么这么不公平呢？”其实，文章虽然基本包括了题目所要求的内容，但条理不清，语言错误很多，其中很多是严重的错误，如文中用黑体标记出的地方。
怎么样？通过对漫画考题的高、低分实考样卷进行研读，你是不是对自己的作文档次有了一个初步的估计？对自己今后在写作方面的发展方向有了一个清楚的认识？能做到这一点，你今天的学习就达标了。