Think carefully about the iue preented in the following excerpt and aignment below:
When people form opinion about omeone or omething, what affect them mot i not ubtance but tyle. In other word, the way omething appear or i preented i more important than what it actually i. Thi principle affect how people look at their leader and their live, the book they read, the product they buy, and even the ubject they take at chool.
Aignment: I tyle more important than ubtance? Plan and write an eay in which you develop your point of view on thi iue. Support your poition with reaoning and example taken from your reading, tudie, experience, or obervation.
习作修改
学生习作(第一段)
语言修改
Style, of coure, i le important than ubtance. If there i a rotten apple placed in a crytal bowl in front of you, will you eat it happily only for the better tyle?
Style, of coure, i le important than ubtance. If a rotten apple i placed in a crytal bowl will you happily eat it?
本段评点
本文的开头比较有特色，第一句话开门见山直接给出自己的观点，而且观点明确。第二句话用了一个比喻加反问，而且这个比喻十分恰当地说明了形式与内容的关系，很是引人入胜，吸引阅卷人的注意力。