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Part Ⅰ Writing (30 minute)

注意:此部分试题在答题卡1上。

Direction: For thi part, you are allowed 30 minute to write a hort eay on the topic of Student Selecting Their Lecturer. You hould write at leat 120 word following the outline given below:

1.有些大学允许学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师

2.学生选择教师时所考虑的主要因素

3.学生自选任课教师的益处和可能产生的问题

Student Selecting Their Lecturer

大学英语四级考试2006年6月真题精读笔记

一、审题谋篇

就体裁来说,本次四级作文为议论文,话题是关于学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师,属于校园类话题。

根据提示信息可以判断本文为提纲式作文,据此可以把文章分为三段。首段介绍文章的主题“Some univeritie give tudent freedom to chooe their own lecturer for ome coure”。第二段进行事实说明,分析学生选择老师可能考虑的因素:教学风格(teaching tyle)、学术水平(academic)、个性(peronality)、作业要求(aignment)等。由于篇幅有限,考生不能一一列举。应从中选取比较有代表性的、易于表达的,使用firtly,econdly…等词进行逻辑组织。第三段是结论段,从事情的两面性指出其poitive and negative effect。WWw.hAOzuowEn.com

写作时,要选择适当的角度,最好使用第三人称进行论述,这样会让文章读起来更加客观,观点更容易被接受。

二、参考范文

Student Selecting Their Lecturer

An increaing number of univeritie are undertaking ome change by giving their tudent freedom to chooe their own lecturer for ome coure. Thi practice, ever ince it come out, ha been very popular with tudent.

There are everal factor influencing tudent’ choice of the lecturer. Firtly, an ideal lecturer hould have an intereting and humorou teaching tyle, o that tudent can learn their ubject in a relaxed and pleaant atmophere. Secondly, a divere academic background i alo preferred ince a knowledgeable teacher can greatly enlarge tudent’ cope of knowledge. Lat but not leat, a teacher with an agreeable peronality i alo deirable to tudent.

Thi practice undoubtedly ha lot of poitive effect on the preent college education, a it can encourage tudent to take an active part in tudy and urge teacher to improve their teaching quality. However, it can inevitably bring ome negative effect. For intance, ome teacher may try to cater to the tudent’ interet to increae the popularity of their leon, while ignoring the teaching plan, which may lead to the oppoite direction of high education quality.

越来越多的大学允许学生自由选择某些课程的任课教师。这一举措,自施行之日起,就深受同学们的欢迎。

有几个因素会影响到学生对老师的选择。首先,理想的教师应该具有风趣幽默的教学风格,为学生创造一种轻松舒适的学习环境。其次,教师知识多样化也会得到学生的喜爱,因为一个学识渊博的教师会极大地影响学生的知识范围。最后但同样重要的是教师平易近人的个性,这在学生选择教师时也是颇具吸引力的。

该举措的实施无疑对当前的大学教育产生了很多积极的影响。一方面,它鼓励学生对学习采取更加积极的态度;另一方面,也会促使教师更好地改进自己的教学。然而,它不可避免地也会有诸多负面影响。例如,教师有可能只顾迎合学生的要求而忽视教学计划,从而背离高质量大学教育的目标。

三、范文点评

对题材的成功挖掘是写出好文章的前提。文章第二段具体选择了三种比较全面并具有代表性的原因。这样一来,段落层次分明又符合逻辑,是很成功的构思。文章最后一段正反两方面的论述也颇有深度。语言表述简练,没有语言错误。形容词、动词的选择多样化,富有变化。

【生动的用词】

undertake 实行;ideal 理想的;divere 多样的;prefer 喜欢;agreeable 平易近人的;deirable 渴望得到的;undoubtedly 毫无疑问;inevitably 毋庸置疑

【丰富的短语】

cater to 满足;lead to 导致;be popular with 受欢迎;have effect on 对……有影响

【多变的句式】

本文行文过程中尝试着变换不同的句式,让文章读起来不那么枯燥。多种时态交叉使用,使作者思想清晰明了。如:“Firtly, an ideal lecturer hould have an intereting and humorou teaching tyle, o that tudent can learn their ubject in a relaxed and pleaant atmophere. Secondly, a divere academic background i alo preferred ince a knowledgeable teacher can greatly enlarge tudent’ cope of knowledge.”逻辑性强,语言功底深,为文章增添了亮点。

借助逻辑关联词,如ince,a,however等,以及顺序关联词,如firtly,econdly,lat but not leat等,可使论述连贯,思路清晰易懂。文中最后一句是非限定性定语从句 “which may lead to the oppoite direction of high education quality”,它的使用突出了作者鲜明的态度,且言简意赅,紧扣提纲。