My Firt Year in College
Many high chool graduate wrongly aume that univerity life i totally free from worrie. After a period of eriou and olemn tudy in enior three, the hard beaver expect to take a break and develop ome habit. However, many may find later that the ituation may be beyond their anticipation.
I＇ve tried to convince the adult around that the image they have of my univerity life a a free and unretrained one i ome what miundertanding. In reality, chool life i o buy that I ometime wonder if my energy i enough.
About my firt year in college, my life i mainly made up of two part, tudy and practice.A a tudent, the main tak i tudy. In order to gain a high GPA, I have to get ued to the college life tyle and begin a new purue in tudy. It i the learning method that how off mot of the difference between enior tudy and college tudy. ! have a roommate who goe out to have leon in the morning and come back in the evening after the elf-tudy claroom i cloed. The peer＇ behavior make me feel under preure. In univerity, one% view of life i integrally formed and trengthened. I begin to program my future plan and realize that tudy itelf i an affair for me. The more coure I learn by heart, the more maturity I get. Univerity education enure tudent of better job.I uually reckon that time conuming on tudy i worthwhile a it bear uch important event a occupation, career and reponibility.WWw.hAOZUowEN.com
To ome extent, tudy and practice are intertwined, and they begin from the very tart of frehman year. Student Union enjoy almot complete acceptance. It i a place where one can get hi ability trained, have hi competence applied and make a lot of friend who hare the ame interet with him. But ometime, ocial activitie and practice are time conuming, what＇ more, the ene of reponibility alo require you to make effort to fulfill the tak.
No one tart in one＇ preent poition all along that it wa what he or he want to do. Sometime, the chance will jut lead you down ome unforeeen trail only if you have a prepared mind. My firt year in college i not relaxed, but all way along i full of curioity and atifaction.
简评
通过这篇作文，我们看到了一个值得佩服的女大学生，学习努力，又积极参与社会实践，具有明确的人生目标，大一的生活过得充实而幸福。
从intertwine，time conuming，reckon等词汇可以看得出来，作者的语言功底较为扎实，词汇的使用准确而地道。作者从学习和实践两个方面进行阐述，并在末尾进行了总结，对文章开头进行了呼应，显示了作者娴熟的写作手法。
不过，从标题来看，这篇文章应当是写作者对大一的总结和感受。论述提纲也是如此，但作者有点过于注重论证，去jutify自己各方面的行为，而非从内心自我的角度出发去谈自己的感受，作者除了在第二段用了几个I作为句子的主语以外，文章的其余部分几乎没有用I或my，反而是用了几次you，这样显得客观有余，亲切不足，是本文的美中不足之处。